Thursday, September 16, 2010

Incomplete . .

Bharath :

He was the kind that stood out in a crowd. Not for his looks; It was his attitude and mental presence that made p eople take notice of him. He had this knack of making people like him, if he wanted them to. And he had this weird obsession of wanting everyone to like him the way he was. He also liked people so easily, that he ended up hurting himself, because of his expectations . .

He liked her the instant he saw her. Asked later, he couldn’t remember what exactly was going through his mind, when he saw her. He felt there was something intriguing about the way she looked at him. He couldn’t be sure of whether she liked him or whether she despised him or whether she looked at him like every other guy. When he saw her smiling at her friends, he wanted to be lucky enough someday to have her smile at him like that. When he saw her talking to a guy, he wanted to switch lives with him for that single instant. He wanted to be the person she thought when getting up from and going back to sleep. He knew he was being silly with all his wishes but he just couldn’t control how his mind yearned towards her. He was amazed by how comfortable their eyes had gotten over time. But the confusion still remained. He did not want to turn into someone who disgusted her. He’d plan for days about talking to her but would be too circumspect about talking. He wished he could find out how she felt about him but he told himself that that could be found out only the hard way, by getting to know her. puzzle_incomplete-1

Deepthi :

She kept to herself. She was not exactly anti-social but had difficulties liking people instantly. She detested attention even if it was positive. But she never was able to be harsh to people even if she hated them. But even though she kept to herself, people recognised her because of her looks. Her mouth didn’t have to tell others if she was angry or happy. It was pretty apparent from her face. Only one person had trouble reading them and she had no idea of telling him that as well . .

She normally didn’t look out for people when she walked. She was always lingering in the silent world of hers. But one face was becoming particularly redundant. She had thought he’d stop looking just like the other guys eventually did. But there was something about him that was different. Probably the way he looked at her. He was not casual about her and he was so bad at acting like he was casual.Without even knowing it, she caught his eye more often than she’d have wanted. It was like he was searching for someone deep inside her eyes. She felt special when he looked at her like that. But she wasn’t so sure whether she liked this complete-stranger who never talked. She’d have been better off ignoring him like the other guys. But deep inside her, she felt this was the guy that the girl inside her would love to talk to. She wanted to know what was so special about her. She wanted to know if he was like the others. She wanted to know ‘him’ and surprisingly, she wanted him to know her. .

P.S: Some stories are better left incomplete. I want each of you to imagine their future in your own way rather than me telling it.

22 comments:

Gayatri said...

reallii cute :)

Unknown said...

Thanks :)

Arch.. said...

just imagination or reality barani?? ;)

Unknown said...

Uh-huh. Imagination of course, atleast half of it. :)

Aswin Kumar said...

I was already into imagination when I started reading this! lol! ;-)
Great job! :)

Unknown said...

Lol!Thanks :)

Unknown said...

hey excellent feel bharani!!i loved reading it..ur choice of words are too good..keep it up..this is one of ur best posts..

Unknown said...

Thank you :-)

Matangi Mawley said...

that was a gr8 start... you know it is gr8 thinking wht would happen later.. but as say- sometimes incomplete things stay bck in one's mind for longer times!

Unknown said...

@Matangi Yeah. That's why i didn't spoil the thrill ;) As a matter of fact, even i don't know where this ends. LOL!

Karthika said...

I rushed home and eagerly started reading ur blog.I din expect this sort of writings from u.really interesting...continue blogging..

Unknown said...

@Karthika Lol, thanks! :)

Monica said...

have been wanting to read this ever since u told me abt this blog... though u read it out to me , nothing like readin it ... loved the way u hav brought out the thoughts of both bharath and deepthi... :-)

Unknown said...

@Monica Thanks :)

Tulasi said...

You're right bharani! This definitely is your best post ! I LOVED reading it. honestly.

Also, i know where the inspiration came from :p

But very nicely written. Triple like :)

Unknown said...

@Tulasi I never said this was the best ;) And thanks :)

Upasana said...

for the fiction part "Incomplete" is good, but for the non- fiction part completion is good if the circumstances are favorable, Bharani!

Unknown said...

@Upasana True true. The Fiction part won't be left incomplete :P

Indira said...

Very beautiful Bharani! I love the way they connect through their eyes. Things that they are unable to say, are being communicated in those glances. Though it confuses them, I think it signifies the fact that they feel a connection, even a spark! ;-) :-)

Unknown said...

@Indira Even though it sounds extremely supportive to mine cause, i should remind you that both mindsets are brought out by one person's writing here ;) So, they tend to be connected anyway.

janani said...

hey too good:)superb feel:)u have portrayed the feelings of both of them like exactly how it would be..jus wanna know how come u penned down the girl's feeling so well?;)

Unknown said...

The thing is, i assumed those things, being the optimist I AM. And thanks :)